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Manguvia Custom MTG Set
#1
Posted 27 November 2014 - 07:41 PM
#2
Posted 12 February 2015 - 04:38 PM
#3
Posted 14 February 2015 - 01:54 PM
Alright, so I hadn't seen this set before, and I'm glad you updated it or I would never have found it! So anyway.....as some first comments I would just like to say great job on the wording here... I still remember what your first cards looked like, you have definitely gotten a ton better sense then, so great job! I especially like the theme of dragons and beasts causing havoc and destroying each-other, while these "guardians" are protecting their gates. As far as changes go....
Power Level
While these are some seriously over the top cards, like beyond the norm, that really doesn't matter for a set, I would just request you keep a consistent power level throughout the set. What I'm saying is, look at Lost Monastery. This card is way beyond the normal power range of a rare, being fully functional as a forest, so you can easily search for it, entering in untapped, and being able to gain tons of life. I don't mind this being above the normal power level, as most of the cards here are. But some of the cards, like the common, Primalticope, need a buff. I'm not saying you can't have vanilla creatures as commons, or that its bad, but I would at the very least put it above the normal power level of a common. One way you could do this is make it a 5/5. Then it would have a greater power level than most commons, just as your uncommon's, rares, and mythic's all do. If you are confused why I think one or more cards here are above the normal power level, I can explain if you want me to.
Mistakes?
Here are some things you did I really don't think you meant to.
- Vasengald does not have a power/toughness level.
- Vusen's last ability should say something more like, "Instead of paying the mana cost for blue Beast creature spells in your hand, you may instead pay [X], where X is that spells converted mana cost.
- With Visceral Tribeast, it will already be tapped when you attack with it. To get the effect I think you were going for here, try wording it, "Whenever Visceral Tribeast attacks, it does not untap during its controllers next untap step unless you pay [4]
- Raphael should say, "Put a horse out for each time it was kicked" not X. Obviously not this exact rules text, keep all of what you said about the 2/1 and everything, just replace "X" with "for each time it was kicked".
If you have any questions just ask, great job on this set!
#4
Posted 15 February 2015 - 10:44 AM
Wow that what i call a proper review thank you very much
for the first point i never noticed it im gonna fix it asap
the second is interesting i will probably change it for this
the third point is where i cant agree because if someone give it vigilance it become way over the top that why i make this effect
and for the fourth point i totally agree.
#5
Posted 17 February 2015 - 12:18 PM
the third point is where i cant agree because if someone give it vigilance it become way over the top that why i make this effect
Ah okay, I did not realize that's what you were going for. But vigilance isn't really the only ability that would send this over the top, and this effect is rather weird- I like weird, but this is kind of hard to understand for most. If you want to keep it as it is, that's completely fine, it is a completely valid effect. I would change it to something like "Can't be the target of spells it's controller controls." This would avoid evil shenanigans.
#6
Posted 18 February 2015 - 06:36 AM
i always hear this word but what is a shenanigan? (i dont really like to google thing)
#7
Posted 18 February 2015 - 05:51 PM
i always hear this word but what is a shenanigan? (i dont really like to google thing)
Haha, always feel free to message me with any problems on word definition/syntax help.
Shenanigans is craziness, mischievous deeds, cheating, things that don't quite make sense but are used anyway.
Example context:
I went down to Mox Mania today to pull some Shenanigans.
He only won that game because he used Shenanigans.
"Why would I do that!?", "Because Shenanigans."
#8
Posted 18 February 2015 - 10:27 PM
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