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[Goji]

Hey, guys,

 
So I made a small set of cards based around kaiju from the Godzilla series. Fans of the series will enjoy, I hope, but even if you don't know too much about it, hopefully the cards are still cool.
Let me know if you have any feedback or constructive criticism. 
Thanks!

 

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[Jdrawer]

A few things:
*English grammar botches. General punctuation is missing, and things could be proofread a bit better.

*Invalid creature types. I'm all for creating new types, but a Pteranodon is a Lizard, Moth is an Insect, and so forth. I'm not complaining about Mutant Dinosaur, because I honestly can't tell you what Dinosaurs are supposed to be. They're all Lizards, but I feel like there's more than that.

*When referring to a Legendary creature in its card text, you only need to state the name, not the full card name.

*Instead of "Island Basic Lands," you should say "Basic Islands."
*Landfall is not exclusive to just Mountains and Forests. If you want it to be just Mountains and Forests, remove Landfall and just say "Whenever a Mountain or Forest enters the battlefield under your control."

*You don't have to say "tap" for costs anymore. Just say "{r}{r}{g}, {t}:"

*Put lines between your paragraphs.

*Colons between costs and effects.

*In regards to Anguirus and Ghidorah, blocking additional creatures is nice, but it's a good way to die early.

*Anguirus's stats, colors, and abilities are spot-on for the character.

*Ebirah's first ability can be rewritten as "Opponent's creatures lose Islandwalk."

*Ebirah may also be a bit overcosted, perhaps?
*Ebirah is a good blue fatty, perfect for the color.
*Godzilla's regenerate cost is nice, but its Landfall effect is kinda wonky. Out of the three, I'd probably go for the counter, but trample would work better overall.

*"King Ghidorah gets +2/+0 if a creature entered the battlefield or was exiled this turn."
*I think Ghidorah's overcosted. Ideally, this is a card that'd do a lot, but with its blocking effect essentially meaning death and its morbid-esque effect being nearly useless without a good sac engine, you're essentially paying 8 for a 6/6 flyer. 8 for an 8/6 vigilant flyer might work, but...
*Mothra's effects are spot on for its character.

*Rodan is definitely overcost. Perhaps make it a 5 drop or make its double strike static.
*Go Go Godzilla!

[Goji]

A few things:
*English grammar botches. General punctuation is missing, and things could be proofread a bit better.

*Invalid creature types. I'm all for creating new types, but a Pteranodon is a Lizard, Moth is an Insect, and so forth. I'm not complaining about Mutant Dinosaur, because I honestly can't tell you what Dinosaurs are supposed to be. They're all Lizards, but I feel like there's more than that.

*When referring to a Legendary creature in its card text, you only need to state the name, not the full card name.

*Instead of "Island Basic Lands," you should say "Basic Islands."
*Landfall is not exclusive to just Mountains and Forests. If you want it to be just Mountains and Forests, remove Landfall and just say "Whenever a Mountain or Forest enters the battlefield under your control."

*You don't have to say "tap" for costs anymore. Just say "{r}{r}{g}, {t}:"

*Put lines between your paragraphs.

*Colons between costs and effects.

*In regards to Anguirus and Ghidorah, blocking additional creatures is nice, but it's a good way to die early.

*Anguirus's stats, colors, and abilities are spot-on for the character.

*Ebirah's first ability can be rewritten as "Opponent's creatures lose Islandwalk."

*Ebirah may also be a bit overcosted, perhaps?
*Ebirah is a good blue fatty, perfect for the color.
*Godzilla's regenerate cost is nice, but its Landfall effect is kinda wonky. Out of the three, I'd probably go for the counter, but trample would work better overall.

*"King Ghidorah gets +2/+0 if a creature entered the battlefield or was exiled this turn."
*I think Ghidorah's overcosted. Ideally, this is a card that'd do a lot, but with its blocking effect essentially meaning death and its morbid-esque effect being nearly useless without a good sac engine, you're essentially paying 8 for a 6/6 flyer. 8 for an 8/6 vigilant flyer might work, but...
*Mothra's effects are spot on for its character.

*Rodan is definitely overcost. Perhaps make it a 5 drop or make its double strike static.
*Go Go Godzilla!

Thank you very much for the helpful feedback! I'll definitely use this when I'm editing my cards and making more in the future. Glad you also thought the cards were fitting of the characters!